Close your eyes

by John Doe 9 Replies latest jw friends

  • John Doe
    John Doe

    and let your vision darken. (this may be difficult to read with your eyes closed, but bear with me ;-)

    Hear that monotonous hum? That's your computer fan. Hear that persistent hiss, that's your a/c. Hear the softer tone, that's your refrigerator. Now, crack open your window. Hear that clicking, ratchety sound? Those are crickets. They are a soft tempo amongst the frogs croaking. Feel that damp air with the night smell? Smells good, doesn't it. Fresh, clean, and relaxed.

    Now, drift back in time. You were sitting on a creek bank, perhaps fishing, perhaps picnicking, and it started getting dark. This was years ago, and your best friend is sitting by your side. The frogs and crickets connect you with your past, and the night air remembers.

    Listen to the sounds, and let your vision fade back to black. A zigzagging lighting fast line will zip back and forth across the horizon of your darkness, and dreams will beckon. And you can hear the sound of it coming. It seems to be drifting at first, but then it starts to take direction, and it's coming towards you. As it nears, you see a soft glow, and you know that the thing is much bigger than the soft glow you see in the darkness. You can hear truth, and you can see your purpose. And then you awake and see the dull computer screen. You wonder what your purpose was, but it will take you all your life to realize that you must write it. I can't do that.

  • cognizant dissident
  • FlyingHighNow
    FlyingHighNow

    Very nice, but with my eyes closed, I couldn't get past the first line.

  • sweetface2233
    sweetface2233

    I fell asleep.

  • Hortensia
    Hortensia

    that was well-written, very evocative. Thanks!

  • John Doe
    John Doe

    "Very nice, but with my eyes closed, I couldn't get past the first line."

    See with your mind. Even blind men have vision.

  • John Doe
    John Doe

    "that was well-written, very evocative. Thanks!"

    You're welcome. I haven't written anything in a while, and I'm trying to get into the frame of mind. ;-)

  • Hope4Others
    Hope4Others

    Its easy to imagine when a story is well written with your eyes are closed or open. you should try to get back into it. Today Snakes was describing his camping trip and I could

    vision every detail as it happened. It was as if I could see the people even. Maybe that's just the way my brain works, I can describe something lets say

    decorating and the husband just can't see it till its totally done and in front of him. I see all the colors objects before I even get going. Maybe it is

    just a matter of training your brain frequencies to work together both hemisphere sides....I don't know.

    Well Done!

    cheers

    hope4others

  • changeling
    changeling

    changeling :)

  • snowbird
    snowbird

    John Doe, you have a gift that should not be neglected.

    I've noticed your love affair with words.

    I'm sure you've entertained the idea of writing a book?

    Sylvia

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