I don't say this to be mean... I say this to help you improve your efforts.
It is too long, covers too many topics, makes subjective observations and makes accusations without supporting evidence.
You have to remember, if a non-jw saw this, he would quickly conclude that it was a document of strong opposition to the JWs and dismiss it as too one sided.
You also have keep in mind that people’s attention span these days is not what it used to be - keep it short and sweet.
Try this - make a one-page document with large text that covers one or two brief topics with brief supporting evidence.
As an example:
First the Catholic Church, now the Jehovah's Witnesses.
Is a pedophile knocking on your door?
Jehovah's Witness’s internal policies make it very difficult or impossible for pedophiles to be removed from congregations or the Door-to-Door work.
* Before a person can be found guilty of molesting a child, the accused must either admit to the act or the victim must provide two or more eyewitnesses for each instance of the abuse before the congregation elders will act against the accused. (Note: the victim does not count as a witness)
* If there are not two or more eyewitnesses, then the accused is presumed innocent.
* If the victim attempts to warn others about the person the victim will be shunned by the congregation for slander.
In coming weeks Dateline NBC will be covering this topic. For further information call: 1-800-NBC-NEWS ext. 4801 Richard Greenburg (US only)
(Note: this is not a publication of NBC)
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You may want you add a PO Box as a contact point - They are cheap at the Post Office.
"As every one knows, there are mistakes in the Bible" - The Watchtower, April 15, 1928, p. 126
Believe in yourself, not mythology.
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