crucifixion

by jesusstolemyhotrod 3 Replies latest jw friends

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  jesusstolemyhotrod

  morning all,

  i have not been here very long, but i wanted to share a bit of myself with all of you. i have been writing stories and poetry since i was about 11 years old. i wrote this one after my df'd brothers suicide, it sort of summed up my feelings on the wts, the calous elders and there treatment of suicide, all the bull shit, and how i felt about the way my family was treated. i wanted to share it with all of you, i hope you enjoy and please let me know what you think.

  Crucifixion

  silence is a deafening whisper

  pain the moment before i bleed

  the rape of virtue not forgotten

  crippling my sense of need

  shadows cast illumination

  forgiveness is a fallacy

  forcing me to bear their weakness

  nailing my hands to the tree

  your sins are deep within you

  i will tear them out and leave

  children hung by their repentance

  the wicked are the ones that grieve

  saviors standing standing all around me

  passing judgement on many lives

  smashing stones against the worthy

  who crumble as the promise dies

  the curtains torn the tombs are empty

  as the shepards cause the weak ones pain

  the iron heats with your defiance

  and brands me with the mark of cain

  hand me your cup of poison mercy

  hoist me up for all to see

  slap me with your fists of cruelty

  as your judas counts his fee

  mothers cradling their own sorrow

  screaming for their child's demise

  i wear this thorny crown of hatred

  and pity drips into my eyes

  i have done what is known as the "poor mans copyright" on this. i would appreciate it if you did not use it for anything and just leave it as a post. but please let me know what you think.

  thanks
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  Witch Child

  I think it is wonderfully dark, angry and amazing! It's terse and lovely. One poet to another, my hat is respectfully off to you, for both your skill and your courage in exposing your work to public scrutiny.

  ~Witch
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  truthseeker1

  This is exactly how I feel about it. I went through some grief counseling in HS when my dad died and there were some people in the group who had family members commit suicide. The would get so angry when their church/religion would tell them that the person was going to hell/not be resurrected. It is such a crule thing to do. The WT is also guilty of this, shepards causing the weak ones pain. They are so quick to pass judgement on people. They forget that the people who need help are the survivors.

  Its such a tragic thing to lose someone, and to not help that person get though the loss is just horrible!

  Great, emotional poem, btw.
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  Vivamus

  This gave me the chills, it went right through my soul. Beautiful.

  I am so sorry for your loss.