welcome, Isn't it nice to associate with open minded people.
rekless
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Hi, like to introduce myself.
by The Nothing Man inex witness of 20 years here.
by the grace of god (or something anyway) i managed to get out.
i visited this forum about 5 years ago and noticed the u.n. issue.
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query letter to lit.agent--feedback needed
by rekless inwhat did dwight d. eisenhower, evelyn mandela, venus and serena williams, lou whitaker, prince, larry graham, pattie smith, teresa graves, mickey spillane, gloria naylor, margaret keane, viv nicholson, naomi campbell, the jackson five, and the wayans brothers and sisters have in common?
jehovah's witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers" for the watchtower bible and tract society's social-religious regime.
while this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated of all occupations and skills into a fantasy dream world with only three ways out.
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rekless
Thank every one who participated and I will apply your suggestions.
I am using writersmarket.com, and several other agent lists.
The reason I tied the celebrities into this letter I am quering an agent who has represented some of the celebrities listed.
The garden sentence has to do with George Orwell's "Animal Farm."
I realize the cult thing and the marketing aspect of just Jws' but there are also many more social-religious systems, and with the current interest in Muslims, Sciencetology and Mormonism.
There was a book just picked up by an agent and sold to a main stream publisher entitled: I'm Perfect, You're Dead: Tales of a Jehovah's Witness Growing Up.
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query letter to lit.agent--feedback needed
by rekless inwhat did dwight d. eisenhower, evelyn mandela, venus and serena williams, lou whitaker, prince, larry graham, pattie smith, teresa graves, mickey spillane, gloria naylor, margaret keane, viv nicholson, naomi campbell, the jackson five, and the wayans brothers and sisters have in common?
jehovah's witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers" for the watchtower bible and tract society's social-religious regime.
while this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated of all occupations and skills into a fantasy dream world with only three ways out.
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Mad Tiger,
Thanks for the encouragement.
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query letter to lit.agent--feedback needed
by rekless inwhat did dwight d. eisenhower, evelyn mandela, venus and serena williams, lou whitaker, prince, larry graham, pattie smith, teresa graves, mickey spillane, gloria naylor, margaret keane, viv nicholson, naomi campbell, the jackson five, and the wayans brothers and sisters have in common?
jehovah's witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers" for the watchtower bible and tract society's social-religious regime.
while this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated of all occupations and skills into a fantasy dream world with only three ways out.
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JeffT
Hi, Yeah, I know what you mean--I have received quite a few rejections also, so I am revising my letters and submission.
All it takes is the right person at the right time.
Keep trying and good luck--we do need the god of good luck don't we?
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query letter to lit.agent--feedback needed
by rekless inwhat did dwight d. eisenhower, evelyn mandela, venus and serena williams, lou whitaker, prince, larry graham, pattie smith, teresa graves, mickey spillane, gloria naylor, margaret keane, viv nicholson, naomi campbell, the jackson five, and the wayans brothers and sisters have in common?
jehovah's witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers" for the watchtower bible and tract society's social-religious regime.
while this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated of all occupations and skills into a fantasy dream world with only three ways out.
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Abandoned,
Thank for your suggestion--I did think it came across too hateful even though the MS is written in a soft voice but my little lady said it sounded good to her.
Help yourself. I will appreciate an edit.
Does this rewrite take the sting out?
Is there too many celebrities? Should the list be shorter?
What did Dwight D. Eisenhower, Evelyn Mandela, Venus and Serena Williams, Lou Whitaker, Prince, Larry Graham, Pattie Smith, Teresa Graves, Mickey Spillane, Gloria Naylor, Margaret Keane, Viv Nicholson, Naomi Campbell, the Jackson Five, and the Wayans Brothers and sisters have in common? Jehovah's Witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers." While this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated paradasic dream world.
Losing my son and then my wife twelve years later led me to write THE DREAM PUSHERS:CAPTIVATED BY A SYSTEM OF DECEIT , which is a love story--not a conventional love story between two people, though it begins with two young lovers, then it blossoms into a deeper love as they become captivated with the doctrines of promises of life on a paradise Earth.
Heartbreak often accompanies love and this saga has its' own when their first-born son is diagnosed with Lymphatic Leukemia. Will they adhere to the mandated no-blood doctrine and let their son die for the glory of God or will they forsake their beliefs? Did they stick together or fall apart? How will their friends, family, and faith react to their youngest daughter's rape and abuse when she tries escaping from one fantasy world into another--her own libertine world. The Dream Pushers answers the above questions and more when Rags Walker resigns from his minister's position and stumbles upon a contradiction between the regime's core belief that 607 BCE is the date of Jerusalem's destruction and an ancient history book's quote from the Babylonian Cuneiform Tablets that 586 BCE was the date of Jerusalem's destruction. If 607 BCE is inaccurate--then the entire dream is based on false doctrines. With the click of a mouse a new world opens and swallows up Pleasantville and destroys the Stepford Wives . The "keys of life" disappear along with Rags' faith. His dream world of thirty years explodes into a hellish nightmare as his wife dies just weeks after his discovery of the real Animal Farm,"SugarcandyMountain," and the animals in charge of mandating new slants to the original "7 rules of the Farm" set out by The Wizard of Oz who comes to light as a collective body of seven elderly men hidden behind a curtain of doctrines, dates and prophecies--all of which turns out false.
The marketing value of this work would touch the families and friends of the 24.5 million active and inactive followers of this one religious regime as well as millions of other members of oppressing religious systems world wide.
I am seeking an agent who is qualified to present this work, and it would be an honor to send you the completed manuscript. I look forward to hearing from you.
Thank you for your time and energy to read this query and short synopsis.
Sincerely,
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query letter to lit.agent--feedback needed
by rekless inwhat did dwight d. eisenhower, evelyn mandela, venus and serena williams, lou whitaker, prince, larry graham, pattie smith, teresa graves, mickey spillane, gloria naylor, margaret keane, viv nicholson, naomi campbell, the jackson five, and the wayans brothers and sisters have in common?
jehovah's witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers" for the watchtower bible and tract society's social-religious regime.
while this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated of all occupations and skills into a fantasy dream world with only three ways out.
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What did Dwight D. Eisenhower, Evelyn Mandela, Venus and Serena Williams, Lou Whitaker, Prince, Larry Graham, Pattie Smith, Teresa Graves, Mickey Spillane, Gloria Naylor, Margaret Keane, Viv Nicholson, Naomi Campbell, the Jackson Five, and the Wayans Brothers and sisters have in common? Jehovah's Witnesses raised, taught, converted, and enticed them to become "dream pushers" for the Watchtower Bible and Tract Society's social-religious regime. While this chronicle is not about any of the above celebrities, it probes the doctrines, which lure the talented, and educated as well as the ignorant and uneducated of all occupations and skills into a fantasy dream world with only three ways out. Abscond or fade--each has the same effect--discarded, disassociated, and disfellowshipped by organization, friends, and family with the third exit being the supreme sacrifice--death. Losing my son and then my wife twelve years later led me to write THE DREAM PUSHERS:CAPTIVATED BY A SYSTEM OF DECEIT , which is a love story--not a conventional love story between two people, though it begins with two young lovers, then it blossoms into a deeper love as they become captivated with the deceitful doctrines of promises of life on a paradise Earth.
Heartbreak often accompanies love and this saga has its' own when their first-born son is diagnosed with Lymphatic Leukemia. Will they adhere to the mandated no-blood doctrine and let their son die for the glory of God or will they forsake their beliefs? Did they stick together or fall apart? How will their friends, family, and faith react to their youngest daughter's rape and abuse when she runs away escaping from one fantasy world into her own libertine world.
The Dream Pushers answers the above questions and more when Rags Walker resigns from his minister's position and stumbles upon a contradiction between the regime's core belief that 607 BCE is the date of Jerusalem's destruction and an ancient history book's quote from the Babylonian Cuneiform Tablets that 586 BCE was the date of Jerusalem's destruction. If 607 BCE is inaccurate--then the entire dream is based on false doctrines. With the click of a mouse a new world opens and swallows up Pleasantville and destroys the Stepford Wives . The "keys of life" disappear along with Rags' faith. His dream world of thirty years explodes into a hellish nightmare as his wife dies just weeks after his discovery of the real Animal Farm,"SugarcandyMountain," and the animals in charge of mandating new slants to the original "7 rules of the Farm" set out by The Wizard of Oz who is uncovered to be a collective body of seven elderly men hidden behind a curtain of deceitful false doctrines, dates and prophecies.
The marketing value of this work would touch the families and friends of the 24.5 million active and inactive followers of this one religious regime as well as millions of other cult members of oppressing religious systems world wide.
As a man who gave his life and love to a fantasy dream I am seeking an agent who is qualified to present this work to the world, and it would be an honor to send you the completed manuscript. I look forward to hearing from you.
Thank you for your time and energy to read this query and short synopsis.
Sincerely,
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Church buys minister a Rolls Royce
by Burger Time inthis was great.
especially the quote, "without a doubt, my life is not average," he said.
"but i'd like to say, just because it is excessive doesn't necessarily mean it's wrong.".
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Well, don't forget that muti-billion dollar extravaganza in New York. We paid a hell of alot more for those things than that damn car--matter of fact didn't we pay for every COs' and DO's vihicle and their insurances.
He got a house and car they got a whole damn printing empire that we all bought and paid for.
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excerpt from chapter 1
by rekless inchapter one: the potters mold.
i should have done something, anything--turn up the heat, go to the restroom, anything different from what i was doing--sitting motionless, hypnotized, watching my brother-in-law lee, sitting emotionless across the dimly lit hospital room with a blank stare on his face as he observed my youngest daughter, rachelle, and me holding his sisters hand weeping.
each comatose induced movement of her eyes kept beat to the ticking of the wall clock while she fought using every breath to sustain her life.. the three of us knew the inevitable; it was just a matter of time and a terrible strain as i struggled with my emotions.
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yes, I'm seeking agents.
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excerpt from chapter 1
by rekless inchapter one: the potters mold.
i should have done something, anything--turn up the heat, go to the restroom, anything different from what i was doing--sitting motionless, hypnotized, watching my brother-in-law lee, sitting emotionless across the dimly lit hospital room with a blank stare on his face as he observed my youngest daughter, rachelle, and me holding his sisters hand weeping.
each comatose induced movement of her eyes kept beat to the ticking of the wall clock while she fought using every breath to sustain her life.. the three of us knew the inevitable; it was just a matter of time and a terrible strain as i struggled with my emotions.
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rekless
There is 21 completed chapters, and I have a problem up loading to this site.
I do appreciate your critiques.
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excerpt from chapter 1
by rekless inchapter one: the potters mold.
i should have done something, anything--turn up the heat, go to the restroom, anything different from what i was doing--sitting motionless, hypnotized, watching my brother-in-law lee, sitting emotionless across the dimly lit hospital room with a blank stare on his face as he observed my youngest daughter, rachelle, and me holding his sisters hand weeping.
each comatose induced movement of her eyes kept beat to the ticking of the wall clock while she fought using every breath to sustain her life.. the three of us knew the inevitable; it was just a matter of time and a terrible strain as i struggled with my emotions.
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Chapter One: The Potter’s Mold
I should have done something, anything--turn up the heat, go to the restroom, anything different from what I was doing--sitting motionless, hypnotized, watching my brother-in-law Lee, sitting emotionless across the dimly lit hospital room with a blank stare on his face as he observed my youngest daughter, Rachelle, and me holding his sister’s hand weeping. Each comatose induced movement of her eyes kept beat to the ticking of the wall clock while she fought using every breath to sustain her life.
The three of us knew the inevitable; it was just a matter of time and a terrible strain as I struggled with my emotions. I whispered letting my lips caress her neck and ear, "Honey it is okay if you want to let go, and with my next drawn breath pleading, "Please, Trisha please, don’t die. I need you, the kids need you, your mother needs you." All the while, Trisha’s gown grew damp from the tears Rachelle and I shed.
I had spent every waking moment from her diagnosis six days earlier begging God, Jehovah, Jesus, and every other deity who crossed my mind; even going so far as selling myself to the Devil in hopes the woman who was needed by so many would not die. It was then with my head resting on her breast a sickening feeling engulfed me and I felt my hopes, dreams, and faith slip away. I came to the realization no one was going to answer my prayers, not God or the Devil.