That was a fine use of free time. Very nice.
Balsam
"It's The Truth!" (A Poetic Retrospective of the Watchtower Society)
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fullofdoubtnow
That is fantastic Confession, thanks for sharing. It was almost like reading the story of my life in the jws.
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Confession
Glad you liked it, Balsam and FullOfDoubt. I hope it reads as I intended it to. Sometimes the interpretation you want to present isn't how it's taken by others--especially when there is a meter or rhythm to it. Thanks for reading!
Confession
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thecarpenter
Enjoyed the poem, you hit many good pts.
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Merry Magdalene
~Merry
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Confession
Only dawns on me now that the last couple of verses didn't work too well. Saying they should "Research all the data from alpha to beta" doesn't convey quite the sense of completeness I intended since Alpha means "A" and Beta means "B." Also the "Indoctrinat-ed were our minds" doesn't flow. Stuff like this bugs me. So I had to fix it...
If you keep dismissing, you’re cognitive dissing
Inspect things as if you’re a sleuth
Research all the data alpha to omega
There’s no doubt you’ll find the real truth!
It’s the Truth, it’s the Truth!
It was never the Truth
Captivated and blind were our minds
Not the Truth, not the Truth!
So for you we will root
That a good life you one day will find!
Whew... There.
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Good Girl or Bad Girl?
Thanks for sharing that, Confession. It is wonderful. (I like the revisions you made as well.)
Good Girl
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Confession
Just looking back on all these posts from years ago. Had forgotten about this one, and thought I'd bump it. :) -
Vidiot
Hmm.
Makes me want to come up with something myself...
...maybe in Seussian rhyme.
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pronomono
Great work.
Only dawns on me now that the last couple of verses didn't work too well. Saying they should "Research all the data from alpha to beta" doesn't convey quite the sense of completeness I intended since Alpha means "A" and Beta means "B." Also the "Indoctrinat-ed were our minds" doesn't flow. Stuff like this bugs me. So I had to fix it...
If you keep dismissing, you’re cognitive dissing
Inspect things as if you’re a sleuth
Research all the data alpha to omega
There’s no doubt you’ll find the real truth!
It’s the Truth, it’s the Truth!
It was never the Truth
Captivated and blind were our minds
Not the Truth, not the Truth!
So for you we will root
That a good life you one day will find!
Whew... There.+1 to this. My first thought was Alpha to Zeta, but Omega has a much better biblical significance.