***UPDATE*** - Please critique my speech!!!!

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  • sinis
    sinis

    Thanks to JWFacts who helped me out. Please feel free to advise me of changes, or additions. Please keep in mind that my speech is supposed to be 6 minutes or less so I don't think I can add a whole lot. If you see something that should be changes let me know, and perhaps I can take something out. Also, I have to add some more PowerPoint Pictures so if anyone has any suggestions I'm all open. Hopefully I can give a GREAT anti-witness to my wife and her dub family (some of them) as well as inform my professor when I send her the video tape. Thanks!

    **Alright how to I paste a Word doc to this site? I keep getting an error when I paste it and then submit it. Thanks!**

    OK, Finally got it.

    Topic: Religion can breed intolerance.
    General purpose: To persuade.
    Specific purpose: To persuade my audience to evaluate their religion and beliefs.
    Central purpose: To persuade my audience that religious belief’s can be divisive and breed intolerance towards others.
    Introduction
    I. Attention material
    A. Twenty three years ago, a young man of twelve was told that he could no longer speak to his grandfather, and that his grandfather would no longer be allowed to associate with his extended family.
    B. This young man did not see or speak to his grandfather for another eight years, even up until the time his grandfather passed away.
    C. That young child was me.
    D. You might be wondering what sort of crime was committed to handout such a harsh sentence.
    E. The crime was that my grandfather chose to use tobacco products which were against the doctrinal teachings of the Jehovah’s Witnesses, for that he was excommunicated.
    II. Orienting material
    A. Let’s look at a few examples of religious intolerance.
    1. Did you know that the Thirty Years’ War that began in 1618 was started due to a Protestant leader throwing two Catholic emissaries out of a window and into a dung heap?
    a. The result was 14,000,000 deaths.
    b. Deaths were due to war and starvation.
    2. Or how about the ten year old girl who had to watch her mother get beat to death by two pastors from the Church of the Kingdom of God, in Brazil.
    a. What was the reason?
    b. The reason was that the mother refused to enter into the church.
    3. Further, what about Jean-Claude Lavoie who was only 26 years old and suffered from a curable intestinal tumor.
    a. Jean-Claude Lavoie did not die from the tumor.
    b. Jean-Claude Lavoie died because he refused a simple blood transfusion, due to religious doctrine, that could have saved his life.
    4. Finally, who can forget about the tragic events that unfolded during the morning hours of September 11, 2001, where 3,000 Americans died?
    B. These events, and countless others that are very similar, take place all over the world on a daily basis.
    C. Each of these events show the grim side of religious intolerance and misguided beliefs, it is with us every minute, of every hour, of every day.
    (Show Slides of Religious Wars and Affects - Slow)
    D. Gay activist Harvey Milk once said, “The fact is that more people have been slaughtered in the name of religion than for any other single reason. That, THAT my friends, is true perversion.”
    E. Do YOU belong to a religious organization that shuns or persecutes its members or those on the outside because of differing beliefs?
    F. Have YOU really stopped to think about what YOUR religion teaches and how it affects YOU or those around you?
    Transition (Let’s examine this issue in more detail)
    Body
    I. Many people truly believe that they are doing Gods will, through the practice of their religion.
    A. Most religions have a set of core values that are similar, such as love yourself, love your neighbor and love your god.
    B. Unfortunately, each religion interprets its holy books differently which can lead to a set of doctrines that exhibit intolerance.
    C. The examples mentioned above indicate that those individuals truly believed that their actions would elicit God’s elation by adhering to their religious doctrines.
    D. How can people be so blind?
    E. It is because religion controls people based on faith.
    F. Faith is a belief based on things that cannot be proven.
    G. Sadly, displaced faith has led people to shun, kill, or be killed.
    H. Although you may not kill someone else because of religious intolerance, you may adhere to beliefs that go far beyond the momentary pain of death.
    I. Can you think of a doctrine that you adhere to that could potentially cause family or secular tension and intolerance simply because of their differing beliefs?
    J. If so, how can YOU overcome this?
    Transition (Now that we have seen the problem, let’s look at the solution?
    II. Educating oneself on religion can lead to enlightenment.
    A. The more we know about our beliefs the more we realize, as I mentioned before, that most religions have at their core the same fundamentals.
    1. The first fundamental is love of yourself and neighbor.
    2. The second fundamental is worshiping our creator.
    3. The third fundamental is a belief in an afterlife.
    B. We need to educate ourselves and promote the education of others to see that religion should not divide, but unite us.
    C. This can only be done if we concentrate on our religious similarities and not our differences.
    D. Can you imagine a world where people do not live in terror because of religious extremists?
    E. Can you imagine not having to live a lie for fear that you may be shunned by your family or friends if you let it be known that your beliefs do not coincide with theirs?
    Transition (Religion can be a beautiful thing, if you so choose, and if you keep an open mind and show tolerance for everyone)
    Conclusion
    I. Summary
    A. Religious wars have plagued almost every century of mans existence.
    B. Change, however small, can eventually eliminate this problem.
    C. To be successful in your religious life, you must not belong or tolerate religions that promote bigotry or intolerance.
    D. You must analyze your religion, educate yourself about your religion, and focus on the core principals of your religion.
    II. Clincher
    A. They say that the truth, or truth about religion, will set you free.
    B. This can only be done if we remember the words of French Mathematician and Religious Writer, Blaise Paschal, when he said, “Men never do evil so completely and cheerfully as when they do it from religious conviction.”
    Bibliography
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  • SnakesInTheTower
    SnakesInTheTower

    sinis..

    how to I paste a Word doc to this site?

    answer: YOU DONT. You will always get the error if there are any kind of special formatting...

    solution/workaround......copy/paste the text of the Word docurment into an open text editor (Notepad is the simplest)... (highlight the text in word, hit CTRL-C to copy the highlighted text, then place the cursor in the notepad window, hit CTRL-V to paste the text into the window. From there, you should be able to then copy/paste from Notepad into the JWD window for posting.... (not a bad thing to type long posts into notepad and pasting to the board here...in case that error pops up and you have to start over....)

    you can do simple bolditalic and underline formatting (or all 3 at once) within JWD...anything more complicated, you have to use HTML code (ask the Wanderer how he does it)...

    Hope that helps...would like to see what you have on your speech..

    SnakesInTheTower (of the "non-HTML using" Sheep Class)

    ps...after I posted, you figured out how to do it another way... good for you..now I will read on, but post tomorrow if I get a chance..its midnight now)

  • SnakesInTheTower
    SnakesInTheTower

    ..havent read it all, BUT... first the commendation (from a former Borg TMS Overseer...ha ha) Sinis ...you have excellent points that would be interestng to hear if you had the time.

    now the "counsel", but dont worry, no W for you....

    ..... you do have too much material for 6 minutes or so...which is too bad, because you really have great info...if you read that outline as written out loud, as in a speech, it will go beyond 6 minutes...I know, I timed it....over 6 for certain...

    ....this is not an outline, its a manuscript masquerading as an outline (with the I, II, III, A, B, C format)... slim down the outline, know your material (which I think you do), and speak from the heart. If you have this outline up there during your speech, you will be tied to it and monotone.... go up with a simplified outline, and you will be extemporaneous and you will WOW them,.,,,,

    and if you do a powerpoint, KEEP IT SIMPLE AND USE SIMPLE GRAPHICS WITH EASY TO READ, GOOD CONTRASTING TEXT that can be read from the back of the classroom...it may look great on your computer monitor, but look horrid from the back of the class........dont get fancy with the animation, graphics, etc....

    just my opinion...and by the way, I went through a realspeech class in college about a year ago... I know the TMS helped some... but I learned how much I did not know about giving a proper speech...RE:mostly that you have to back up what you say with real facts...not Borg Provided facts...

    hope you do well..

    SnakesInTheTower (of the "still hates giving speeches" Sheep Class)

  • sinis
    sinis

    Thanks, I really appreciate the comments. The professor requires a full sentence outline and then speaking notes. This was the full sentence outline. I haven't added the citations yet, will work on that tomorrow. I realize that its too long. Thoughts on what to cut? Thanks again. It's funny you mention not backing up your arguments with fact, when I was in I found that most public talks were never backed by facts, nor were Sunday outlines ever cited. Makes you wonder...

  • jwfacts
    jwfacts

    That is really great. I love your introduction, it is good that you can draw on a real life experience; people will be shocked to know that you were forced to cut off and shun your grandfather simply because he was a smoker. I hope the information is taken with offense by your wife but that it touches her heart a bit.

  • DJK
    DJK

    I like it. I hope you can shorten it without losing the info that would raise some eyebrows.

  • Hortensia
    Hortensia

    if the theme is religious intolerance, then take out the fellow who died because of refusing a blood transfusion. That isn't religious intolerance, that is just a nutty doctrine inside that religion.

  • AWAKE&WATCHING
    AWAKE&WATCHING

    I agree with Hortensia, pare it down to just what applies to the intolerance theme and you'll do fine. Go get 'em! That must have been very fulfilling to work on.

    Snakes - Who needs facts when you've got the truth on your side ? I'm so inspired now to take some "real" speech and religion classes.

  • lonelysheep
    lonelysheep

    Holy $*** Sinis!!!!!!! Are we in the same speech class?????????????? My next speech is a persuasive one, too.

  • LtCmd.Lore
    LtCmd.Lore
    anything more complicated, you have to use HTML code (ask the Wanderer how he does it)...

    Well, I don't know how Wanderer does it, but personally when I want to use more advanced formatting I write up my post in an 'outlook express' email message, then copy the source out of there.

    Lore

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