Agent hook, What do you think?

rekless

"Elmer Gantry", Jim and Tammie Faye Baker, Jimmie Swaggart--all caught
in scandels, and their Empires crumbled.
Why are some religious organizations considered "a snare and a racket"
and brought down,while others get away with blood on their alter?

The Dream Pushers will leave you reeling as you follow a family of seven
who thought they found God as they begin a thirty-five year journey
seeking "the keys of life". The journey begins not on "the yellow brick road",
but down "the straight and narrow path directly through the "Gates of Hell" where
they experienced the pangs of death and addiction only to discover something much darker—
"the keys of life" came, not from heaven and God, but from eleven mortals whose thrones
sat in a multi-billion dollar Bible publishing conglomerate located at 25 Columbia Heights Brooklyn, New York 11201-2483 guised as God’s Earthly Organization.

rekless

scandels: for the spelling Nazi, please accept my apology. scandals

badboy

BTTTT

poppers

Sounds good, but do you really need to include the ZIP code?

poppers

Also, not to be picky, it should be "altar".

Mum

It's a good grabber. Are you writing a book, making a film, doing a documentary?

Regards,

SandraC

rekless

writing a book 98 k manuscript.

Also, not to be picky, it should be "altar". thanks will change BTTTT, you lost me, but thanks for your input. Sounds good, but do you really need to include the ZIP code? Well what do you think? Will it be better without the zip. thanks for input will run spell ck again on final draft and rewrite.

Mum

reckless: Running the spell check is fine, but it will not change "alter" to "altar" because both are real English words, the former meaning "to change," and the latter meaning a structure in a holy place such as a church or temple (loose definitions on the fly). You need one of us spelling Nazis to do some editing, or use a dictionary if you are unsure of the spelling of a word. English has a lot of confusing homynyms.

Regards,

SandraC

JWdaughter

Might be a bit long to be a 'hook'. Good bones, maybe edit it a bit.Can't wait to read it!

poppers

From reading your hook I am definitely interested; I hope it hooks an agent.

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