The Fragile Rose

by msil 10 Replies latest jw friends

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  msil

  Delicate, soft, floating envelope
  please to my suffering soul reveal
  what it is you conceal…

  “Oh suffering soul, why do you want to know?
  I carry the special secret of unconditional love…
  the kind of which there is none above…”

  Is it for real, envelope?
  I am dead inside, totally numb
  my heart, just a machine that beats like a drum

  “Oh suffering one, there is a way…
  for you to be whole
  for you to feel love from the depths of your soul…”

  Envelope…..show me, please show me
  happiness eludes me all the time
  please, tell me the secrets of your rhyme…

  “Sickly one, but I need to ask you:
  are you sure?
  can you handle it? It is so demure…”

  Envelope…you are being so obtuse
  please surely you know
  there is not much lower that I can go

  “Alright, earthly soul
  find someone truly special, someone who knows
  and open up your soul like the fragile rose”

  Oh envelope, surely that’s not all
  there must be more to know
  so that my love can grow…

  “Yes earthling try…
  and see how it feels deep in your heart
  just do it and wait for it to start”

  Envelope, you are so right
  I feel so alive, so …so…free
  This is unconditional love coming over me?

  “Earth-son...take it slow
  make sure you are always in control
  unconditional love is designed to come from within your soul”

  Dear Envelope I don’t understand
  why do you conceal unconditional love
  why doesn’t it find everyone like a hand to a glove?

  “Ahhh weakling good question….
  Because like the fresh rose, love also flowers
  And its fragrances possess magical powers”

  It sure feels like magic
  I love this feeling...like floating
  Surely others would classify it as gloating?

  “Son, there is one more thing you need to understand
  the sun will come out and the roses petals will fold
  most roses die, as you will behold”

  But….but.. envelope then how will I know
  that its for real?
  How will I know that this is how love should feel?

  “There in lies the secret of the fragile rose…
  YOU DON’T…you just have to let the rose be
  and if it lives, then true power you see!!”

  And what if it dies?
  What if it doesn’t last?
  What if my head feels like it is spinning too fast?

  “Then, son, you can be sure
  it was not love, it was some other derived fake
  now please go your merry way and don’t make that mistake”.
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  LittleToe

  Hmmm...nice job!

  Good use of pitch, pace and power.
  Steady on the pausing.
  Good use of reasoning and questions.
  Excellent illustration.
  Went a little overtime, though.

  Look forward to your next effort.

  LT
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  MrMoe

  Little Toe - Let's see you write something better hun.

  I enjoyed reading it, I can relate - that's for sure.
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  Andee

  I just found this, Msil.

  Well done.

  However, love does have conditions. It always has. It's not a mere vapor, but an act. Love is not in what we feel, but in what we do.

  Andee
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  wannahelp

  Excellent MSIL..

  And, for the record, I happen to believe that unconditional exists and is alive and well!!!!!!

  Actions speak louder than words, but actions not based in love are empty... Actions based from love are divine!!!!

  Sorry Andee, I disagree with your statement..

  Excellent post MSIL!!!! Keep up the good work!!!!

  - Wannahelp
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  IMBlueFire

  MSIL....

  It was nice meeting you last night. I admire anyone who is willing to reveal the secret parts of themselves that most keep hidden. Showing your vunerabilites in my opinion is a sign of one's character. Any type of art a person creates whether it be painting or prose is an extension of one facet of their being. Thank you for revealing a little about you to us. Keep stepping outside the box.

  Yours in spirit,

  Blue
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  Satanus

  msil

  I liked it.

  SS
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  Andee

  Hey there Wannahelp,

  Certainly, you owe me no apologies on your disagreement.

  I'm used to being the voice in the wind

  Andee
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  siegswife

  I love this poem...

  (((However, love does have conditions. It always has. It's not a mere vapor, but an act.)))

  Actions are a *result* of love, not a condition.
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  COMF

  most roses die, as you will behold

  People die, too. They leave, whether through death or choice or circumstance. Any channels of support they provide--love, self-worth, happiness--will close at their leaving, and that supply will exist only in memory. Best to get your answers from within yourself. You are the one person who can never leave... and the most likely candidate for a friend and supporter. Unconditional love of self is difficult if you're trained and experienced in self-deprecation. But training can be overridden; habit can be broken.

  It's a wonderful thing not to need anyone's love; to accept it as offered if offered, and its absence if not. True unconditional love doesn't exist until true love of self does.

  COMF