My difficulties in writing academic essays, contrasted with the same difficulties by NK elites

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  • fulltimestudent
    fulltimestudent

    I struggle to write good academic essays. I'm never happy with the result of my labours. I've had a few HDs, but still feel they lack something.

    For some months, I have been pondering why I have this problem, and the realisation is becoming clear that my problem is the result of having my brain washed clean by Jesus for 40 years (my period of enslavement to the WT cause). I believe the problem started because of the training I recieved in the organisation, particularly in the field of Public Talks. I believe that I gave reasonably good public talks, but no public talk outline was about 'argument.' they were about 'narrative,' telling a story. Even if the talk was about 'soul immportality' it was told in story format.

    Study the gospel accounts, and what do we see, a story about Jesus. Its not surprsing when we consider the context. Jesus was, scholarship now realises, a wandering charismatic, travelling the countryside, telling stories about a restored (and greater) Israelite Kingdom.

    Ever since, his followers (of whatever brand name) have done much the same.

    Bur surprise, there are others with the same problem.

  • fulltimestudent
    fulltimestudent

    The small group of western NK watchers are having a mild fit. There exists in North Korea, a privately run University, specifically for training the children of the elite that runs NK. Its known as, the Pyongyang University of Science and Technology. How it got to be in NK is another story, nearly all the staff are obsessed Christians - who have a mission, that can be described as helping the dead Jesus achieve immortality by becoming the world ruler, in much the same way that the dead Kim Ilsung is still the eternal President of North Korea

    A woman academic by the name of Kim Suki (no relation to the ruling Kims), got a position teaching English, at that University. And, of course, writing essays, even for science graduates should be routine.

    But it wasn't, and her experience mirrors mine, and possibly yours, which is why I post this. (see the next post)

  • fulltimestudent
    fulltimestudent

    Here is Ms Kim's story, as re-published in the National Post:

    (Sorry of the long paste job-but it's her story)

    http://news.nationalpost.com/2014/12/02/the-incredibly-bizarre-experience-of-teaching-in-north-korea-where-critical-thinking-is-unimaginable/

    NATIONAL POST

    The incredibly bizarre experience of teaching in North Korea, where critical thinking is unimaginable

    Suki Kim, Slate | December 2, 2014 12:13 PM ET

    Adapted from Without You, There Is No Us: My Time With the Sons of North Korea’s Elite by Suki Kim. Out now from Crown Publishers.

    Essay was a much-dreaded word among my students. It was the fall of 2011, and I was teaching English at Pyongyang University of Science and Technology in North Korea. Two hundred and seventy young men, and about 30 teachers, all Christian evangelicals besides me, were isolated together in a guarded compound, where our classes and movements were watched round the clock. Each lesson had to be approved by a group of North Korean staff known to us as the “counterparts.” Hoping to slip in information about the outside world, which we were not allowed to discuss, I had devised a lesson on essay writing, and it had been approved.

    I had told my students that the essay would be as important as the final exam in calculating their grades for the semester, and they were very stressed. Each student was supposed to come up with his own topic and hand in a thesis and outline. When I asked them how it was going, they would sigh and say, “Disaster.”

    I emphasized the importance of essays since, as scientists, they would one day have to write papers to prove their theories. But in reality, nothing was ever proven in their world, since everything was at the whim of the Great Leader. Their writing skills were as stunted as their research skills. Writing inevitably consisted of an endless repetition of his achievements, none of which was ever verified, since they lacked the concept of backing up a claim with evidence. A quick look at the articles in the daily newspaper revealed the exact same tone from start to finish, with neither progression nor pacing. There was no beginning and no end.

    So the basic three- or five-paragraph essay—with a thesis, an introduction, a body paragraph with supporting details, and a conclusion—was entirely foreign to them. The idea they had the most difficulty comprehending was the introduction. I would tell them that it was like waving hello. How do you say hello in an interesting way, so that the reader is “hooked”? I offered many different examples, but still they would show up during office hours, shaking their heads and asking, “So this hook … what is it?”

    One morning, they shouted, “We beat Japan!” in unison as I walked into the classroom. Their national soccer team, Chollima, had just beaten Japan’s Samurai Blue team in a World Cup qualifying match. The match had taken place at Kim Il-sung Stadium and had been televised live.

    Here, the rage against Japan remained as vivid as when Japan had colonized Korea more than half a century before. The students were exuberant, proudly telling me about Jong Tae-se, their national team’s striker, and another one of their players who had been scouted by Manchester United. They did not acknowledge the fact that Jong was in fact a third-generation Zainichi Korean, a term used for ethnic Koreans born, raised, and living in Japan whose loyalty lie with North Korea. In their eyes, Zainichi Koreans were Japanese, their sworn enemy, and yet at opportune moments they considered them North Koreans. I knew better than to comment on that.

    “How exciting!” I said brightly. “Wouldn’t it be great if Chollima makes it to Brazil for the World Cup?” They all nodded, smiling.

    It was not until later that day that I looked on the Internet (to which only the teachers were allowed access; the students were not aware of its existence) and learned that North Korea had already been knocked out, and the results had been announced some time ago. The match against Japan had to be played simply because it was a game owed. Either the students would not admit this, or they did not know the truth. Not only that, I learned that the game had not actually been televised live. Rather, it had been broadcast as soon as it ended, when the regime could be certain that their team had won. One student told me that it was very boring to watch only winning games. Moreover, no matter how hard I searched online, there was no mention of a North Korean footballer playing for Manchester United. As always, their government had sown misinformation, and my students’ claims lacked any basis in reality, so I could hardly expect them to back up their theses.

    Instead of a lesson on sources, which was not possible there, I asked that they read a simple essay from 1997 that quoted President Bill Clinton on how important it was to make all schools wired. The counterparts had approved it because it related to our current textbook theme of college education. I hoped that they would grasp the significance of the Internet and how behind they were. I also gave them four recent articles—from the Princeton Review, the New York Times, the Financial Times, and Harvard Magazine—that mentioned Mark Zuckerberg, Facebook, and Twitter. None of the pieces evoked a response. Not even the sentence about Zuckerberg earning $100 billion from something he dreamed up in his college dorm seemed to interest them. It was possible that they viewed the reading as lies. Or perhaps the capitalist angle repelled them.

    he next day, several students stopped by during office hours. They all wanted to change their essay topics. Curiously, the new topics they proposed all had to do with the ills of American society. One said he wanted to write about corporal punishment in American and Japanese middle schools. Another wanted to argue that the American government’s policy of deciding a baby’s future based on IQ tests should be forbidden. A third student wanted to write about the evils of allowing people to own guns so freely in America. A fourth student said biofuel was toxic and America was the biggest producer of it. A fifth wanted to change his topic to divorce. There was no divorce in the DPRK, but in America the rate was more than 50 percent, and divorce led to crime and mental illness, according to him. “So what happens when people are unhappy here after being married for a while?” I asked. The student looked at me blankly. Still another student wanted to write about how McDonald’s was horrible. The same student then asked me, “So what kind of food does McDonald’s make?”

    One student asked me which country produced the most computer hackers; he had been taught that it was America. This question stumped me, especially since I had just seen a news item on CNN Asia about cybercrime by North Korea. Instead, I told him that computer crimes could be committed anywhere, by anyone, even a visitor, so it would be hard to pinpoint one country as the source.

    Their collective decision to switch their essay topics to condemn America seemed to have been compelled by the articles about Zuckerberg. What I had intended as inspirational, they must have viewed as boasting and felt slighted. The nationalism that had been instilled in them for so many generations had produced a citizenry whose ego was so fragile that they refused to acknowledge the rest of the world.

    My efforts to expand their awareness kept backfiring. When I had them write a paragraph about kimjang (the annual kimchi-making tradition), I was handed a pile of preachy, self-righteous tirades. Almost half the students claimed that kimchi was the most famous food in the world, and that all other nations were envious of it. One student wrote that the American government had named it the official food of the 1996 Atlanta Olympics. When I questioned him, he said everyone knew this fact and that he could even prove it since his Korean textbook said so. A quick Internet search revealed that a Japanese manufacturer had claimed that kimchi was a Japanese dish and proposed it as an official Olympic food but had been denied. Somehow this news item had been relayed to them in twisted form and was now treated as general knowledge.

    To correct my students on each bit of misinformation was taxing and sometimes meant straying into dangerous territory. A colleague said to me, “No way. Don’t touch that. If their book said it was true, you can’t tell them that it’s a lie.”

    Sometimes they would ask why I never ate much white rice. They piled their trays with huge heaps of it at every meal, whereas I always put just a little on my tray. I explained that I liked white rice but did not care for it all the time. They asked what kinds of food I ate other than rice and naengmyun, their national dish. I couldn’t exactly go on about fresh fruit smoothies and eggs Benedict, so I named two Western dishes I knew they had heard of: spaghetti and hot dogs. I knew that North Koreans enjoyed their own version of sausage because I had seen them lining up for it at the International Trade Fair. One of the students then wrote in his kimjang homework, “Those Koreans who prefer hot dogs and spaghetti over kimchi bring shame on their motherland by forgetting the superiority of kimchi.” Nothing, it seemed, could break through their belligerent isolation; moreover, this attitude left no room for any argument, since all roads led to just one conclusion. I returned the paper to him with a comment: “Why is it not possible to like both spaghetti and kimchi?”

    After several lessons on the essay, a student said to me at dinner, “A strange thing happened during our social science class this afternoon.”

    They never volunteered information about their Juche class, so I listened intently.

    The student continued, “We had to write an essay!” He explained that they normally wrote short compositions in Korean, and he had never thought of them as essays before, but now he did, and it made him feel strange.

    “What was so strange?” I asked.

    “I don’t know,” he said, pausing thoughtfully. “I looked at it as an essay, and I realized that it was different now. Writing in English and writing in Korean are so different, but then it is also the same, and I kept thinking of the essay structure as I was writing it, and it made me feel strange.”

    Why is it not possible to like both spaghetti and kimchi?

    I did not question him further, but I thought I understood. It must have been deeply confusing to approach his writing on Juche like an essay. In his country there was no proof, no checks and balances—unless, of course, they wanted to prove that the Great Leader had single-handedly written hundreds of operas and thousands of books and saved the nation and done a miraculous number of things. Their entire system was designed not to be questioned and to squash critical thinking. So the form of an essay, in which a thesis had to be proven, was antithetical to their entire system. The writer of an essay acknowledges the arguments opposing his thesis and refutes them. Here, opposition was not an option.

    I stared across at him and felt a familiar sick feeling. Perhaps this was only the beginning. The questions they would have. The questions they should be asking. The questions they would realize they had not been asking because they did not imagine they could, or because asking meant that they could no longer exist in their system.

  • fulltimestudent
    fulltimestudent

    Think about it!

    I realise that my mind is still influenced (how could it NOT be influenced) by 40 years of intellectual imprisonment. That's why I can tell a story OK, but its is more difficult to construct an argument. Like the young NK men, shut off from the wider world, they by birth, we by choice, we cannot imagine a different world

    And, if we think more widely, isn't it like that for other Christians also? Think of those that have posted on this site, they are no different to what we were as a brand JW.com Christian. Its about a story, abnout narration.

  • LoveUniHateExams
    LoveUniHateExams

    Erm... what are HDs?

  • fulltimestudent
    fulltimestudent

    Ms Kim, by the way, is being bitterly criticised for having blown the cover of the "Christians" who are behind this huge subterfuge.

    The possibility exists that the NK leadership are already considering what to do with this school.

    I have seen, on such sites as this, criticism of the JWs for their 'theocratic war strategy,' which justifies telling lies, to advance (in their terms) Kingdom interests. But the truth is that the technique of deception runs right through Christianity. There are many brands of Christians deceptively preaching throughout East Asia, all with the desire to implant the mind of Jesus into the minds of other people. I have a feeling that a crisis point is approaching, having just recently noticed a complaint by some Tibetan Buddhists who had signed up for an English course in Xining, Qinghai Province. These women complained that the reading material was all Christian and that they felt sullied by the deceptive experience. Such problems seldom make it to the mainstream press unless the authorities are thinking of taking some action.

  • Terry
    Terry

    It is perhaps escaping your attention that you've posted an essay on not being able to write an essay!

  • Oubliette
    Oubliette

    FTS,

    Terry's very funny quip aside, writing a blog post is not the same as an academic essay.

    For what field or discipline are you trying to hone your writing skills? What level? Secondary? University? Graduate?

    Let me know, I could possibly point you toward some resources that could help you develop your writing skills.

  • likeabird
    likeabird

    For some months, I have been pondering why I have this problem, and the realisation is becoming clear that my problem is the result of having my brain washed clean by Jesus for 40 years (my period of enslavement to the WT cause).

    I beg to differ on this. Academic essays are not easy for anyone to write, regardless of their background. I'm still learning the ropes, but at the beginning it surprised me the number of people who have trouble with it. I think it's definitely a universal problem.

    For me, having been deceived for so many years, it meant that when I woke up I checked all the facts in minute detail. I use the same level of scrutiny for my academic work.

  • Terry
    Terry

    In my opinion, good writing comes from reading good writing.

    I can see how reading the execrable Watchtower publications could scar you for life!

    However, if you can get your hands on whatever represents the finest representation of good Academic Writing,

    why couldn't you reverse engineer it with a view to what sets it apart?

    _________________________

    I have a friend with a remarkable skill as an etching artist.

    He entered several of his etchings in an "art judging event" at the local bank.

    His work received 3rd place and he was bummed out.

    "How could those amateurs who did such obvious things win out ahead of my work?"

    I told him this:

    "It wasn't your work not measuring up which brought that result. It was the judges (employees of the bank) demonstrating

    their personal preferences."

    He looked quizzically at me, "What's the difference?"

    I told him, "Don't you think a wine connoisseur makes different choices than does an ordinary Joe-Six-pack?"

    "Yes."

    "That's all that's going on. Different kinds of people have different levels of expectations, tastes, and standards. End of story."

    ______________________

    A rigorous list of "Academic standards for an Essay" would be your first order of business.

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