“Terry”: “Is it disturbing to you when an author jumps into the flow of history and radically departs in order to drive an important lesson home to the reader?”
No, I think that certain historical elements are important to the overall import and flavor of your message. The secret is in the weaving – the historical context should be woven into the story in a manner which preserves clarity and coherence and doesn’t cause confusion.
The goal, I think, would be to allow all types of readers to readily make the intended connection to mind-controlling, totalitarian administrations and regimes – especially the one we’re all to familiar with: the WTS.
It looks like The Monorails of Mars could be an excellent vehicle to allow many lurkers and fence-sitters to get a glimpse of their little sectarian forest from a bird’s-eye perspective and to shine a critical and objective light on the inner workings and operational strategies of that little forest’s leadership. Sometimes it takes the subtleties and nuances of a radical and introspective type of parody to force people to look into the mirror and see the connection with their own personal involvement in their little utopian “spiritual paradise,” even if it’s firstly just on a subconscious level. Such choice eclectic creativity may certainly be up to what it takes to allow those insightful seeds to be planted in folks’ subconscious to germinate and graduate into full-fledged and deliberate conscious thought – and decision.
Perhaps many JWs, especially nearer the fringes, will first look at that and say, “How ridiculous!,” only to soon thereafter exclaim, “My God, that could be about my own story! It looks like that really illustrates exactly what I’ve allowed myself to get tangled up in!”
Your book will be just the thing to show people in WT land what their Society really looks like from the outside. Let the presses roll.