EXCERPT from my novel: I WEPT BY THE WATERS OF BABYLON

by Terry 40 Replies latest jw friends

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  Terry

  Gripping novel.. I know it will do well. I am so sorry that you had to go through some terrible things in your JW life and I know it will never go away.....I wish I could write a book myself.. get it all out. My children were abducted by their JW father and assisted by Witnessess in any part of the country. I lost complete touch with them for six months and they were only four and nine. My heart was totally ripped out of me. I can forgive but I can never, ever forget... I truly hope you will get some relief from your suffering with this writing. Take care, Terry.. you are loved by many.

  Thank you. I believe you and so many others of us each have an important story to tell. We swallow the bitter pill and pretend life goes on. But, somehow, it just doesn't!

  The more candles we light; the less the darkness will hide the awful truth about The Truth.

  Don't lose touch with your own story. Try writing it out without worrying about plot, style or such--just cough it up. Once you've done that; you'll have the strength to go on and do more.

  I encourage everybody to get their own story out if just to see it in front of them.
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  OUTLAW

  Terry..Good stuff!....Looks like you got a winner on your hands.....OUTLAW
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  Satanus

  Heavy stuff. There was a prison warden, Andrew Vachss, who wrote similar.
  
  S
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  Open mind

  Excellent work Terry!

  Thanks for taking the time to get it down on electronic paper and share it with us.

  Open Mind
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  Satanus

  Congratulations for going ahead and writing it. I know that we all have our own stories, and we should get them out. It's a great theraputic exercise.
  
  S
  
  Ps, may i suggest a small change in the title? The 'waters of babylon' phrase is excellent. I would suggest putting 'by the waters of babylon' first, then a comma and then 'i wept'. I suggest that because waters/rivers of babylon is a commonly used phrase. It's almost like pushing a button, using it. And so, by putting that first, you get in there, so to speak into the psyches of more people, than w 'i wept'. My opinion, for what it's worth...
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  R.Crusoe

  It's an intellectual read filled with emotional tensions. I had a thought about how easily neverJWs would understand any metaphors or analogy! Tricky because I don't know myself on that one!
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  Terry

  Ps, may i suggest a small change in the title? The 'waters of babylon' phrase is excellent. I would suggest putting 'by the waters of babylon' first, then a comma and then 'i wept'. I suggest that because waters/rivers of babylon is a commonly used phrase. It's almost like pushing a button, using it. And so, by putting that first, you get in there, so to speak into the psyches of more people, than w 'i wept'. My opinion, for what it's worth...

  I've done the worry-beads over the title for weeks now. I did a check on the "Waters of Babylon" and there are books with titles that start with that phrase already. The "I wept" sets it apart and makes it first person and immediate. That is the books weakness in that it is written in the third person.

  So, I have really put a lot of thought into it.

  Thanks for caring.
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  Terry

  It's an intellectual read filled with emotional tensions. I had a thought about how easily neverJWs would understand any metaphors or analogy! Tricky because I don't know myself on that one!

  It is a puzzlebox of sorts. Seeing the outside from the inside and the inside from the outside have equal tensions.

  What commands interest, in my opinion, is opening up a world you think you know only to find out that there are secret rooms and hidden knowledge.

  In essence, this is what Dan Brown did with Da Vinci Code. He spoke about religious symbols we all take for granted and used it for a springboard to seemingly endless revelations about hidden things.

  Let us face it; talking about history and religion is almost impossible to do and make interesting. But, if you find the right way of commanding attention and creating curiousity; you've got the leverage.
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  myelaine

  tres bien, Monsieur!

  love michelle
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  hamsterbait

  It goes so well.

  I wanted to know what happens, and it is alive.

  I tried to interest my writing circle in nanowrimo for November but met with total skepticism. I am going to try next year - your example has decided me.

  Well done!

  What strikes me as tragic is how many young witless lives were ruined by the ban on alternative service. I think they lifted it solely because of how widespread this sort of thing is in prison nowadays, and the Gibbering Buddy was afraid of mass rebellion in the face of AIDS.

  HB