Steve2 made some comments about a 10 year old post I made, and I will present them. Although there are numerous typos that could be corrected, his post was much more direct. He said:
: I can see why you've pitched this long and absurdly hard-nosed account at a Christian readership. Only they would compare the absurd Watchtower belief system with their own absurd alternatives. For others, the account teeters just this side of unreadable...its length alone is off-putting. The dialogued approach becomes irritating after a few paragraphs. It's too school teacherly for its own good. Perhaps a better title is. "Telling The Truth Shall Tie You Up In Wordy Knots."
:On the other hand, succinct wording may lift it enormously.
Please rewrite it and show us how it SHOULD be done, SteveO. It is one thing to criticize. It is another thing to walk-the-walk and show us how it SHOULD be written. Since you drew first blood, you owe it to us all to show us in your infinite wisdom how you can cut out words AND make it better, or rewrite it completely and give a better message while still capturing the attention of the readers. That is SIMPLE thing to do is it not? I've read the entire collection of the wisdom of Steve2 and have come to the conclusion that you have eminent abilities to do this. You can form criticisms in sentences of 4 words or less. You have done essays in 2 paragraphs or less. You are a freaking genius! Since you know so much about how what is the better way to write things, please give us your wisdom. Here is the the shitty material I cobbled together ten years ago that you should have no problem working with and making it a masterpiece in your own mind, you weenie:
http://www.jehovahs-witness.com/12/77391/1251412/post.ashx#1251412
Well? Get to work!
Farkel