Elsewhere,
I thought your flyer was perfect. It gave the exact message in just a few words. I think a JW who saw it would be compelled to read it. I think your work will have great impact.
I think that a problem with many writings, is that they are too wordy. A typical Witness will read a few sentences of a long tome and simply pitch it. I do not think they will do that in your case. You shot them, before they had a chance to dodge the bullet.