Broken

by Robdar 16 Replies latest social entertainment

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  Robdar

  This urn is broken.

  The ashes of burnt love

  and spent emotion

  seeping through its cracked sides,

  dusting my mantle.
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  teejay

  And as the haunting imaginings
  
  Of a love gone by
  
  Are caught by melancholy wisps of my mind
  
  I sit in my sun-drenched and lonely room
  
  And dream
  
  Of what could have been
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  Robdar

  TeeJay, That is lovely. I like your additions very much. Thanks for your help. The poetry thang is all new to me. Here is the new poem:

  This urn is broken.

  The ashes of burnt love

  and spent emotion

  seeping through its cracked sides,

  dusting my mantle. And as the haunting imaginings
  
  Of a love gone by
  
  Are caught by melancholy wisps of my mind
  
  I sit in my sun-drenched and lonely room
  
  And dream
  
  Of what could have been
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  LittleToe

  As all that has been,

  and all that ever went before

  is but a fallen shadow

  forming echos of another time

  resounding in my ears

  getting fainter, more forlorn

  as a single tear descends
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  Simon

  Mary had a little Lamb
  She tied it to a pylon
  A thousand volts went up it's bum
  And turned it's wool to nylon

  It's like Milton is in the room ain't it?!
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  mouthy

  Simon!!!
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  Robdar

  LT,

  That was beautiful. I am learning so much about poetry from my friends. The poem gets better and better:

  Broken

  This urn is broken.

  The ashes of burnt love

  and spent emotion

  seeping through its cracked sides,

  dusting my mantle.

  And as the haunting imaginings
  
  Of a love gone by
  
  Are caught by melancholy wisps of my mind
  
  I sit in my sun-drenched and lonely room
  
  And dream
  
  Of what could have been

  As all that has been,
  

  and all that ever went before

  is but a fallen shadow

  forming echos of another time

  resounding in my ears

  getting fainter, more forlorn

  as a single tear descends

  There we all were having a fine time and then there is this: Mary had a little Lamb
  She tied it to a pylon
  A thousand volts went up it's bum
  And turned it's wool to nylon

  It's like Milton is in the room ain't it?!

  Heh, Simon, more like Mephistopheles!
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  Simon

  oooh, there's more where that came from:
  

  Mary had a little lamb
  It was a little bugger
  It climbed upon the table top
  And did one in the sugar

  The girl stood on the bridge at night
  Her lips were all a quiver
  She gave a cough
  Her leg fell off
  And floated down the river

  Jack and Jill went up the hill
  To fetch a pail of water
  I don't know what they did up there
  But now they've got a daughter

  or

  Jack and Jill went up the hill
  To fetch a pail of water
  Jill came down
  With half-a-crown
  You don't get that for carrying water!

  Just keepin' it down to earth
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  Frannie Banannie

  Mary had a little Lamb
  She tied it to a pylon
  A thousand volts went up it's bum
  And turned it's wool to nylon

  It's like Milton is in the room ain't it?!

  (rubs hands together and gleefully grins) Looks like I've "infected" another one...

  Cheers!

  Frannie B
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  MrMoe

  i ain't no poet and now yas know it 'er sumpin'...