The problem is that you're being subjective, you let your opinion in the article. Omit the "if not more" and the last phrase about them reading only the first page and not the entire letter. Or try to rephrase it in a way that it sounds more objective.
Give this a try and let's see how it works out. If i'd be a beleiver witness I'd definitely delete what you wrote or at least edit it just because of what I've mentioned above.