Cedars...I took you up on the song challenge.... (page 3)

AnnOMaly

Fitting the original line/rythmn with the new one:

In -------- all ----- the ----na----tions -- of -- the --- earth

Strewn -- o'--------er ---- all ---- the --- na---tions -- [?]

That's where I was coming from.

cedars

How about adding this verse...

Billions and billions of bodies,

piled up in Arab lands,

and millions more in China,

where Witness work is banned.

Controversial yes, but it might make people think!

Cedars

AnnOMaly

It's good, but the original only has 3 verses.

cedars

No, I mean as a replacement for an existing verse?

Or I could play with the music and extend it somehow? I'm good at that sort of thing.

Cedars

BroMac

great job Diana, your very clever. AnnOmaly is correct, their is extra phrasing at the end of the verses.

here is my small improvement for 3rd verse:

Billions and billions of corpses,

Struck down both far and near.

God's cloud of radiation

Cleared them all outta here.

And as they keep on rotting --

Mountains of putrid men, (hold mennnnn with higher note)

Patient, we wait on God's word ---> Patiently(Pay-Shant-Lee), waiting (Way-Ting) for God's New Scrolls

On how to dispose of them.

diana netherton

Ann... I did notice the typos after I posted it. I did mean strewn..and befall. I am a lousy proofreader.

I would love to see this done on You Tube, Cedars.

Don't forget to mention me in the credits on the video.

cedars

Diana

I would love to see this done on You Tube, Cedars.

Me too, all I need is a singer!

Cedars

AnnOMaly

Have you already done a backing track, cedars?

mamochan13

ya know - there are some interesting possibilities. If someone created a basic back track, several of us could contribute vocals or other pieces via Audacity.

cedars

AnnOMaly - no I've not created the backing track yet, but I could do it for multiple verses very quickly without too much bother. All I need is a singer - or singers!!

memochan13 - I love your idea! It could be a true Bob Geldof / Band Aid multi-singer project. Rather than "Heal The World", this would be "Kill The World"!!

Again, I'm happy to produce it. I just need singers.

Cedars

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